Moment in time writing

IALT use language that is suitable to the topic, audience and purpose (Structure and Langauge)
About to Hatch


I am  walking along a beach and It's already 10:30 am on a Tuesday.  All of a sudden I hear something, I run towards the noise. I can hear someone shouting, “ Oi stop trying to crack open that rock.”


I'm starting to see waves crashing over the boulders as one of them begins to roll slowly towards the waves.


I can hear a booming crash inside the humongous boulder and all of  sudden it starts to crack open.


I can smell the scent of bananas oozing from inside the big rough rock.


I can feel hot sand underneath my feet as I start to move carefully towards the spherical rock.


I can taste salty sea water in the salty air as I move forwards.

Crack! A tiny pink fluffy creature pops out . It is a unicorn.


My reflection on this writing:
Using a range of describing words
I have worked towards achieving my goals by:
Writing about what I sensed was happening at the scene eg what I see, hear, feel, taste and smell.